Recently in class, we read a poem in class about the river mouth. After reading the poem we did some writing changing the words but keeping the same format. Here is my poem...
Kia Ora Hayley. It's Tarshana. I love your poem so much but maybe next time you could write a little bit about why you chose to write about the beach . Great job.
Kia Ora Tarshana, Thank you for the feedback! We wrote the poem about the river mouth, and the mouth of the river joins up with the beach/ocean. So that is why I wrote the poem about the beach.
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Kia Ora Hayley. It's Tarshana. I love your poem so much but maybe next time you could write a little bit about why you chose to write about the beach . Great job.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Tarshana,
DeleteThank you for the feedback! We wrote the poem about the river mouth, and the mouth of the river joins up with the beach/ocean. So that is why I wrote the poem about the beach.